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Nightmare Cell #777 (poetry)

 
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Ark Skyheart



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PostPosted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 6:40 pm    Post subject: Nightmare Cell #777 (poetry) Reply with quote

hey there, um i think some might like my poems some might not but heres a gamble hope you like it alot~

~save Me~ part I

save me...
from this cold...
save me from my home...
save me from my self....
from this old and dirty shelf....

my dreams are no longer friendly!
My love is no longer with me!
Please why won't you save me!
this nightmare is always there....
back of my mind, inside everywhere...

no place to hide from the thoughts in my mind...
dirty thoughts and violent screams...
finding ways to make my heart bleed...
save me!!!!
I’m helpless without you!
No Life Dreamer!
that’s my name...
sinner of the most profane...
spiting out my hopeless fears...
only to replace them with brand new gears...
in a machine that won't stop turning
tearing out my heart with each revolution
burning out all my emotions...
saving me is a hopeless notion....
and yet here you are at my side pulling at this nightmarish ride...
what have I done...
what have I seen
tears will not make me clean this time...
so tell me....what do you think of me now?


~Save me~ part II

...stuck in the machinery...
dropped dead, flesh torn,
and no feeling any more
given up on all I wanted...
stopped thinking about memories
bloody walls, dismembered dolls
teary eyes, starry skies
all things I have lost in the end

hands reaching... bloody screaming
what is that face for?
Haven’t you seen the insane before?
No longer wanted in a world
where your worth is determined
by the way you look.
Barbed wire... in my arm...
under the skin...
answering for my sins...

GOD DAMN! Violent Masters
pulling the cages and killing their
slaves...
drinking there blood and eating there brains
a conquest for power and pain
I have finally fallen from this machine...
blood soaked body
naked and unclean...
this nightmare is not over
seeing you pulling me forward....
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Ark Skyheart



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PostPosted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 6:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

~Save me~ part III

my back is scrapped
my arm is bloody
my heart is hanging
from my chest cavity

a corpse I am not...
still breathing on your love
still feeling this pain from your touch

why do you put up with me?
Dragging me along?
slowing you down...
on the road to your life...

the judge is waiting
his massive blade
ready to cleave
all that’s left of me...
he is coming for you
coming for me...
I love you but
why won't you leave me
to my destiny?

~Save me~ part IV (finale)

Dark fantasies,
dreams that mean
nothing to me

bloody realities
that have become
everything to me

your love is the
only thing saving me...
in a world that has
forgotten me completely

I am crying bloody tears
because you are sacrificing
everything...just to be with me

even though this...is the end of everything...

the door opens cold
moonlight shines
painful cries
fill the air tonight..

I’m...dieing...in your arms
feeling you shake from your sobs
I’m no longer breathing
but I want you to know...

that your the one that saved me...
from this nightmare show


um if anyone likes these i'll post more lol
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Reverie



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PostPosted: Fri Jan 05, 2007 6:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like your imagry, especially for "Save Me II". For the first one, however, I would highly discourage the use of multiple exclaimation marks. They're unnecessary and we already have a good grasp of the emotion of the piece already; they're kind of a distraction. Just one exclaimation mark gets the point across, in other words.

May I also suggest running them through a spell checker as well? Because, for one, it's "dying", not "dieing".

Otherwise, these are some pretty good pieces. Keep writing and you'll get better.
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Ark Skyheart



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PostPosted: Fri Jan 05, 2007 7:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

thank you!, now that i look back on it your right hehe the exclimation points are distracting , and ya i do need to run most of my poems through a spellcheck...lol shows how much i need an editor
((warning some of my poems are kinda Emo >.< but if you bare with me you just might find something you like?))


~crying in her arms~

I try to hold the tears back...
deep inside my heart

but when the blood runs like wine...
its hard to keep them inside

so she comes to me in a dream
when i can barely see...

the tears run down my face...
bluring her wonderful grace

what is happening to me???
when i'm crying into her arms...

she holds me close as i lose
the ones I love the most...

why oh why am I dieing inside...

as I cry...all alone in the rain...
her grave stone brings me so much pain...


and so I stand here crying into her arms...

(my first poem ever ^_^)

there are many kinds of love...
there is dark love, hard love and even strange love...
but none compare to true love...
its the love that makes you climb the tallest mountain...
swim the deepest sea
just to be with the one you truly love...
it's a love that you want to protect with your...


mind
body and
soul

I have found such a love one that makes my heart ache when she is away...and burn when I'm standing beside her......

I believe true love is the greatest love of all everyone deserves to find it...


~Tears and Blood~

Tears and blood
Violent screams
Torrents of nightmares
And dreams
Look into me
What do you see?
A monster in a cage
Waiting to be free
But behind sad eyes
You will see
That this monster
Is only a part of me?
Even if it’s all you
See...
I’m
More than I seem
In this dark and
Depressing dream
Not just a face
That you break
Like glass
Shattering
My future and past
Would it seem you have
Won at last?


((um more soon.i've written lots so there is plenty more~))
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XuShenLi



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PostPosted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 11:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like your poems, especially the Tears and Blood one.
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 10:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

hehe thank you
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 4:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay, now that I've finally managed to get some time for this, I've read through your work. Interestingly, of all of it (in this thread), I liked ~Save me~ part II the most. I've been enjoying an awful lot of twisted mindscapes and messed-up worlds recently, and that section seems like it could be used to evoke an entire such world.

Also, from a writing standpoint, I think you hit an excellent balance in it. Lines like this are particularly good:

Ark Skyheart wrote:
what is that face for?
Haven’t you seen the insane before?

There's so much that starts going in the reader's mind upon seeing this. "'What is that face'? What face? What would be on my face when looking at this person? How would a person have to appear to feel the need to say 'haven't you seen the insane'?" I can imagine, and it's great.

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 8:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

meep wow thank you very much, i've put my poems on other forums i've written tons...but it seems this is the forum for me to post my work...your compliments and observations have/ and are helping me improve thank you all~


oks here is some short poems i wrote a while back, most are dark...maybe i should try to write something happy?

~Falling apart~

I’m falling apart
Falling down
Falling into
The unknown
Loving it all
As I fall
Through
The dark I shall fall
Until you catch me
Pieces and all


~follow me, lead me~

Follow me follow me
In the dark
Lead me lead me
To my heart
Follow me follow me
Through the blood
Lead me lead me
Through the flood
Follow me follow me
To the truth
Lead me lead me
To knowing you
Follow me follow me
Tears in your eyes
Lead me lead me
To my demise

~dance, die, needles in my eyes~

You dance
And I die
You stick needles
Through my eyes
My vision obscured
Blood procured
Sacrifice preformed
Darkness absorbed
Final rest for us all
Chant sung
Until heard through the walls

~drinking my own blood~

Left in the sun
For to long
To rot and burn
Completely unturned
Drowning in a pool of blood
Drunk on the rust on my lips
Sick from the constant resist
My mind has wandered to long
and my eyes burn…
Silly thing for a corpse to learn

((i used to have a friend who lived by me she would go on these long trips and her username was silent dark...you can say i was haveing withdrawls))

~Silent Withdrawals~

I haven’t heard your voice in a week
I haven’t felt you in a week
You’re always on my mind and it hurts
Not knowing when I’ll stop the pain
And end the feeling of never seeing you again
I’ve been alone in my home
Sitting in a corner shaking
Becoming a zombie and never waking
My hand shakes when I dial that number
Unsure if my sorrows will end
Only to be reassured that I won’t hear or see from you again
I try to stop calling
And I try to stop thinking
But you’re on my mind and I can’t help
But tear it out with a spoon
Bit by bit
Giving me more room
With out a mind or a thought…maybe I can move on eh
Silent_Dark?

~kiss me gently~

Kiss me gently kiss me sweet
Kiss me more than either of us can take in a week
Scream at me and tear me apart
Find what I keep hiding in the dark
But kiss me gently kiss me weak

kiss me knowing
I’ll be dead in a week
Kiss me gently kiss me bloody
Kiss me and make me study
Kiss me and cut my skin
Hell kiss me before I die again
But I’ll ask only once and I’ll say it again….
Kiss Me Gently…and then never kiss me again

(honestly i have more...but this is good for now~))
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 4:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ark Skyheart wrote:
maybe i should try to write something happy?

You know, this line here was actually enough to make me smile. "Mope, mope, mope, angst, blood, death, maybe I should try to write something happy?"

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PostPosted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 8:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ya i've tried heres one for you that i just thought up~


~its a kids life~

its a kids life
fun and toys
new transformers
pretty dolls
giggles and laughter
echo through the halls
it may not be christmas morning
but these children do not care
a toy from a loved one
a hug and a kiss
is all that matters when your just a Kid
so smile and be happy
theres a feel in the air
its a Kids Life
arn't you happy you are here?
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 12, 2007 3:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Holy cow! That was great!

I smiled for the whole darn thing.

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 8:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

((a ton of my early poems...oh and totaly glad you liked that last one Rex lol it was very spur of the moment))

“Aerith” a final fantasy 7 poem

She is the one….
That will try to
Save us all…
She will call to the planet
In hope it will answer her
Plea…sphiroth has come
To bring the meteor down
And destroy the planet…
To gain the power that will
Gather…and the only one
That can save us will die…
She will stand up to his sword
And die so that…another can take
Up the task…he will find ‘holy’
And bring sphiroth to his knees
In the name of the love that he
Shares for the flower girl he met
That faithful night in midgar…

Rest in peace Aerith…

~i may not be perfect~

i may not be perfect
i may not be hot

but i know that i love her
even if she may not

i try to woo her
i try to sing

but no matter what i do
she sees strait through me

she sees this guy
he looks so cool

she trys to woo him
she trys to swing

but no matter what she does
he likes a he...

~pain of a tearful girl~

she stands in the rain
holding the bear oh so tight

she is the only one there
to morn the people who

should be there...
the tears are a sign of

...pain

knowing that no one
will come and save...

her from the darkness
inside her heart

because she is the only one
in the dark....

her parents where the
ones who did it...

the ones who....
killed her

and now she doesn't know
that she is the one she is morning

not the ones that had
been living...

~turning away~

I’m always turning away
From the problems every day
I turn away from you
From your love…
It burns me up deep inside
Knowing that I can’t face you
Knowing that I won’t love you
The way you want me to…
So I’m turning away…
From these problems every day
The problems created by your Love
The love that is a constant reminder that
I can’t be what
I want to be
That I am
Nothing at all
Just a shell
Of whom I should be
Because I’m just a doll
With no emotion to show
At all
Just my corner that I turn to
And the star that I dream to
Because after all I’m
Nothing
But a
Doll

~fighting this~


Fighting this is not the problem
It’s getting over the reality
Of what has happened
To you that night

Because there ain’t no use fighting this!
Running away is the only reality
I want too except…the only thing left is to take this final step!

From my troubles and my worries
Hell I’m not in a hurry
All this shit can wait because I only have one step to take!

Why did you fight this!
Why did you play to this!
I don’t understand!
How I could lose you to this!

This shits so fucked up that
I’m starting to lose my understanding
Of what the fuck is happening

You where my light
My every thing
So why the hell couldn’t you
Run away with me that day

The darkness consumes me
The light confuses me
What have you done to me?

I’ll keep asking you this until I understand
That it was all my fault in the end
Being blind to the truth is a ugly thing
So just tell me what I mean….because I don’t
Want to look at the thing I have become…

Living forever!? what was I thinking
The light won’t find me where I am staying
Because in the end you where the one who was thinking
And not the one screaming… a dream that won’t come true
No matter what I do…

~teddy hug~

I'm sitting in my room...
expecting undeniable doom

when you walk in to the room
and show me my gloom

i see your shining face
and joy fills my place

but the darkness does not subside
it grows deep inside...

and i begin to try to enjoy the pain in my heart

the teddy bear grows fangs and leaps in the air
his cuteness is what brings the light to my pain

until i notice the stain...
you look in to my eyes and realize i might refrain...
from stopping this scary thing...

the bear is above me and suddenly.....
Begins to hug me!
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Ark Skyheart



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PostPosted: Mon Nov 03, 2008 5:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

MY name is al. i am a frog. I have hacked this account. ALL YOUR BASE ARE BELONG TO US>
and in commemoration to this being a poetry thread
a message from your neighborhood hacker:


roses are red
violets are blue
'all my base are belong to you

....or rather me in this case
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 02, 2009 2:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, GREAT!
They're necroposting again!

(╬ ಠ益ಠ)

Why do they insist on creating fully realized profiles like this? It's not like they're getting any hits from us, right?





Right?
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